B The Woods of No Turn Back
My friend Josha and me went on a walk in the woods of No Turn Back. The wards No Turn Back has a big meaning in these woods so we could not turn back. But the title did not say we could not walk in a half circle or a strait line until we walked all the way around the world and weir back were we started. But now I will get in to the reason we took a walk in the woods of No Turn Back. Well three days ago I was eaten a golden apple when I say a golden apple I mean a golden apple some of you may wonder why my teeth did not break. Well You see I am a Goldling (GOLD LANG) and we only eat gold. Well I was on my castle of Eat Gold Here and like I said I was eaten a golden apple. So I eat most my apple when a big green bird grabbed it and flew over the woods of No Turn Back and dropped it. Well what I did not tell you be for is that this apple was not only gold. Inside the apple there was a rock of Happy Life witch of curse made you have a happy life at least that is what I was told. Well there I go again off the subject, any way so the green bird took the golden apple off the castle of Eat Gold Here and dropped it in the wood of No Turn Back witch is a problem because it has the rock of Happy Life in it. So I ran down the steps of Long Time to get to my friend Josha house to get him to help get the golden apple witch had the rock of Happy Life out of the woods of No Turn Back were the green bird dropped it. And he said yes so we ran past the blue banana eaten frogs in to the woods of No Turn Back past all that stuff I said in the beginning to find that the rock of Happy Life fell in the pit of Ever Fall. So we could not get it any way now we just hade to get out so we said "the title did not say we could not walk in a half circle or a strait line until we walked all the way around the world and weir back were we started." and we went in a half circle and got out safely. Your probably wondering why we went in a half circle instead of a strait line until we walked all the way around the world and weir back were we started **********************************************************************************************************************OR NOT ***************************************
THE END
finely
Sunday, May 2, 2010
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Hey! Your story was interesting! You maaaayy want to work on your six traits of writing a little more, though. :|
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thats the point!
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